A Smoky Lounge
It is Friday night.
You come home, loosen your tie
and kick your shoes off.
Another day gone,
another week over.
We look at each other, a half smile and a long sigh.
Not bad or is it?
We lie down on the bed.
You ruffle my hair,
and say "let’s go out".
"Sure", I smile back at you.
And then we are there,
at a smoky lounge.
It helps you unwind,
it keeps me amused.
A fair bargain or is it?
You say your hellos,
and I wear my most appropriate smile.
You nurse your drink,
relax and fit right in.
I light up my cigarette
and blow smoke rings.
Friends, music and drinks
you forget the humdrum reality.
I look around and think.
You say I analyze too much,
I think you analyze not at all.
Well it is a good balance or is it?
7 Comments:
lol...good one there...very smooth and conversational...:-)
"You think I analyze too much,
I think you analyze not at all.
Well it is a good balance or is it?...."
lol, a perpetual problem between partners ;) I've started to wonder too if it's a good balance or an absence of balance altogether....
enig!
i loved both ur poems - the casual style is really cool!
silo,
I know ther comparison is not fair, but it's inevitable, once you link them! I liked the first one a lot more.
You think I analyze too much,
I think you analyze not at all.
Well it is a good balance or is it?
That was sublime. But rest of the poem seemed to me like an excuse to say these very lines. I think you can do a lot better.
asuph.
Anantha characters in my poem are not me!!There is the real life and than there is poetry.
Iblu my friend, that is the whole point ;-). and hmm..err.. thanks for so many comments :-)
Buck and SSM thanks for the nice remarks. We know we can always couut on you both for these. :-)
Enig, thanks for dropping by. You said it. That's why the "is it" in the last line.
Ano thanks..Coming from you it is BIG complement. I love your poems.
Asuph thanks a lot for the feedback. At least you have some "faith" in my poetic abilities. "Reporting" abilities aur "character" mein nahin hua to kya hua. :-).
Just kidding. On a serious note, I actually wanted to make two points. One is what you said. And then there is one more. What you said has an element of truth in it. I badly wanted to write something and it might have come out a lil strained.
ROTFL IW!!
Why do you suspiciously sound like my mom and MIL? Now I am much more convinced about the mamu/mausi thing :-).
"sit down together & make plans to have a baby" hmm..er...well sure.And we will name the baby after you..LOL
PS: And on a serious note pls refer to my comment on Anantha's comment.
"... and enig, my very serious, very earnest opinion - that asymmetry is extremely healthy. i'm not kidding (see, no smiley even !)"
thanx SSM.....wud keep ur words in mind while making 'important' decisions of my life :)
sorry SM....just came to check some interesting comments :p:p
enig!
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